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Old new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-10-2005, 10:11 AM
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ive only been rapping 6 months so go easy on the criticism lol


i got my back raised against the wall, like a caged animal/
not fazed by you fools, ready to wage a major brawl/
engaging in the rules, continue to play ball, keep it cool/
as i blaze, amaze, outphrase you all/
i stand up tall,.... and begin to fight foes/
throws a couple right blows, at the height of your nose/
then wipe blood on your clothes, and spear spikes through your toes/
as i chose to dispose those who chose to oppose/
like the saying goes/..... its an eye for an eye/
ill break ya spine, make ya blind, just give it a try/
your live to die,... once you've made your step/
be in a major wreck, have you wishing that you paid respect/

if u can post wot u fink id b gr8ful for pointers
fanx
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-10-2005, 01:03 PM
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pritty good for only starten 6 mounth ago keep at it ull get better as time goes
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-10-2005, 01:05 PM
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fanx man
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-10-2005, 01:41 PM
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whats fanx mean fucken thanx or.......
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-10-2005, 02:01 PM
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wot??
i said thanks.... for giving the time to give advice
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-10-2005, 02:10 PM
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its good for just startin
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-10-2005, 02:23 PM
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o you said fanx and i jus thought it was new slang for thanx i jus thought it ment fucken thanx
but dont lisn to what i say because im an e-tard so the majority of the shit that comes out of my mouth is jiberish e-tared shit
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-10-2005, 02:29 PM
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lol kwl ive checked sum ov ur shit is gd!
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-11-2005, 11:09 PM
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i dont give a fuck just dont do it all the time an its all good keep on doin it thow an it will become a problum but as ov right now its awight jus dont chew more then you can swalow
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-13-2005, 03:08 PM
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If you've been rapping for 6 months your skills should be waaaaaaaaay better.
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-13-2005, 04:28 PM
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Im been rhyming for about a year now so to me its average was that just a keystyle though
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-13-2005, 04:34 PM
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I've been rhyming 4-5 months so that shit was trash to me....
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-13-2005, 04:40 PM
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damn dont smash his hope this boi
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Old Re: new member wanting feedback for verse @ 06-22-2005, 01:08 AM
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'as i chose to dispose those who chose to oppose'
That line did it for me. You are a SICK MC dude. Wow... Keep it up. Get at me though, mc_stewi@hotmail.com. Got a proposition for ya...

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