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Old *New* Pleaase feed. Thankyou =) @ 11-07-2008, 02:38 PM
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i feel i wanna die
i wanna throw it all away
and give up on this life
but i'll stay for one more day

as the world changes i stay i dont change along with it
im chasin to catch things for their away and gone missin
the world always changes at a pace and i dont
i stay just same and alone in this world thats cold
stuck in the storm feeling so alone
with a frozen soul that gets worse as im growin old
i feel crucified cept hung in this noose thats tied
around my throat chokin me as im being bruised inside
by these huge abusive riots beatin on me just watching me lose my life
im strangled inside so when i spit i strangle the mic
with the pain intangled in my insides and their untangled outside
but no matter how hard i try and just stop
the tanglin grief it just tangles in me eventually tying in knots
but i aint that weak im still alive after facin this hell
now its facin me i must survive i have to be savin myself
from my life thats overtaken me it strains and its dwells
on me and angels just yell and say for me to go to church and start prayin for help
cause i play by myself life's game life made in itself

somethis this life just makes me wanna die
it makes me wanna give up and call it a day
really lifes only one day with day and night
one big journey but i wanna throw all it way

this life dont mean nothing i see im just nothing to life
like its nothing to me except maybe just something to fight
this lifes twisted and im cryin for hope and im tryin to cope
its like my necks in this rope its like im only dying to choke
sometimes i sink in inside as i think of this life
and why we're existing alive only dying to live and just die
to me this life just looks like a big soler eclipse and
it consists of a whole in the light that may glow in the distance
shining on past it on the otherside reached by fightin through patterns
to the brighter side of life that may happen to not be bright but still blackened
but i'll hold and fight on through the stormy nights
while holdin tight my faith that pushes me to go on by
and through the holes of time and past the darkened cold of life
movin through illusions through into the warmth and holy light
but is anyone there for me angels say a prayer for me
cause all i really ever wanted was someone to care for me

somethis this life just makes me wanna die
it makes me wanna give up and call it a day
really lifes only one day with day and night
one big journey but i wanna throw all it way

i feel i wanna die
i wanna throw it all away
and give up on this life
but i'll stay for one more day




* i have a better slightly edited version of this, but not completly finished, but i'll post it sometime in the futor, i'll probably add a 3rd verse too

feed would be really appreciated, construtive critism would even more appreaciated, let me know whats good and what i could fix.
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Old Re: *New* Pleaase feed. Thankyou =) @ 11-07-2008, 04:46 PM
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i likes it...9/10 good shit the coures reminds me of "my life" by the game...an i like the first verse the most....im given you n9ne out fo 10 cuz ur the only one lately who puts up full songs...good job
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Old Re: *New* Pleaase feed. Thankyou =) @ 11-11-2008, 02:50 PM
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thanx man =) appreciate it
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