Alright here is some flowin.

People tryin' to diss my-game, bitchin' all the-same, your shit is just-lame/
I'll take this-skill, turn it into a deadly-drill, blood splatter on the window-cill/
Bitch you arent-shit, take the time to think when to-quit, when I-spit, I make you feel this-shit, pickin' up energy eyes-lit/ Im here to show-you, I will never be below-you/
Now your ready to-fight, my shit is just-tight, you know Im fuckin-right, you only seen one head-light/
After I ran your ass-over, who was there to dis-cover, there to un-cover, damn you got no luck in that-clover, sit back, just wait for hell to blow-over/

Peace and give me some feed back. I know Im still in a newbs level but help me out.
Thanx.

*lights a fatty thinkin of another flow*

k well you got the multi's down but thats bout it i mean it doesnt really make sense and your just concentrating to much on the rhyming and the multis. make sure it makes sense first then add big vocab and words,keep it up

Im still learnin so yeah.
Thanx for the feedback.

like the multi's are good for sure but its just that if your going for a nice concept too a song, then theres not much sense to it, but if your just freestyling then its fine i guess, keep writing though

I got more to put up on here so look for em.
Later

yeah punk. if its for a freestyle its kew I think. if u mean to make some songs. u gotta base em on something and tell the story. make it rhyme/flow to a fat beat and ull be set.. keep it going though.
~lates