I have no hope
Neck in a rope
Tripping on acid and high on dope
Fucked mentally
Serenity; comes only with death
You can't see the pain
Until you see slashes on my wrist and you think I'm insane
And it's all because of you
Trying to end it all because of you
Nothing more to do
Blue in arm turning red with the air
Spraying from my veins with pain
Dunked under warm water to relieve the pain but never stop the flow
You knew this would happen and even after death you want more
Can't stand you
Degrading others too
The mass suicide is because of you
Haunting you 'til your conscience kills you
Rapes you
Devestates you
Can't stand it
It's so demanding
This ranting is bringing you down
It's all to get rid of you
Just to get you to kill you too

that waz deep, an full of emotion...you had grea imagery too with...

Blue in arm turning red with the air
Spraying from my veins with pain
Dunked under warm water to relieve the pain but never stop the flow

also thesse lines i liked a lot...

Fucked mentally
Serenity; comes only with death
You can't see the pain
Until you see slashes on my wrist and you think I'm insane

good job :D...~oNe~......

thank you. any other opinions. or is this just too pissed off and the rest of you are a bunch of bitches.

damn this was nice man..
i feel the same way as this

very nice good imagry

cool thanks

yo don. i can see where your comming from. fucked up points in our lives are the best times i think to write out some rhymes.. keep it going when u get past it everything will look good.
~lates

it was aight...not particularly skillful though.

^^^ word

cant really say tho i dont know enuff bout poem writing to evalaute

nice deepness tho

Thanks I meant to keep it somewhat simple yet have it very deep at the same time that is why it doesn't seem too skillful.