topical poece that I made an ill ass beat to.. I may atempt audio.. drop links, and give some suggestions on the third verse topic..

Don’t act like yall never did it before.
I did it once and I’ll do it some more
Don’t act like yall never did it before
I’ll do anything, I’f I’m looking to score
Don’t act like yall never did it before.
I did it once and I’ll do it some more
Don’t act like yall never did it before
I’ll do anything, I’f I’m looking to score

Heres a scenario that I’m sure you’ll be familliar with
you has a lady, but alas you just met this killer chick
when shes around your filled with wit, and clever words
but cool behaviour ain’t helping none to calm your nerves
It’s all a blur, it happened so fast you couldn’t cease
medical studies often state how sex is still a good releasE
you feel a peace inside of you, if only momentarily
when morning comes you start to find some real clarity
barely know the chick you boned, and you have to go home
alone to find out, that ya fling was someone your girly knows
so play it cool right, you had a cool night, just sat on the stool right
but what stings is when the phone rings you know you’re a fool right
and you know who it is, the moment ends, it’s your girls friend
tellin your girl friend what happened, then the world ends, she sends
you packing now think about the way you were acting now
and think of this rhyme the next time, so you can be backing out

Don’t act like yall never did it before.
I did it once and I’ll do it some more
Don’t act like yall never did it before
I’ll do anything, I’f I’m looking to score
Don’t act like yall never did it before.
I did it once and I’ll do it some more
Don’t act like yall never did it before
I’ll do anything, I’f I’m looking to score

yo, you ever started somthing off, and didn’t think it would last
soon it’ll pass, besides it’s not like it’s everyday you get smashed
and you got a lil extra cash, so why not, say fuck it and get high a lot
started off small, hitten ya friends stash, never would buy a rock
you won’t die or drop, you feel more alive now than you’ve ever felt
you tried to talk out your problems that you’ve got, that shit never helped
but when your numbing the pain, suddenly you start to feel like your sain
the sadness of the world melts and inner madness just go’s away
you know there’s no way, it’d affect you badly, your job wasn’t great
so what if now when you don’t have it, your habit makes you fluster and hate
your check’ll be here in a matter of days, god bless the first of the month
you keep losin weight, your mates left you, your smoking cocain blunts
it’s ignorent and just silly to say drug addiction is a violent place
when it makes sure you’ve got some friends and a smile on your face
but today is your day, so put on your suit, and rember this verse
and people said you couldn’t afford a big car, shit your sportin a hearse

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Shit dude, you're good.

Originally posted by Mink
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Shit dude, you're good.
Danke

UPPIN FOR REAL FEEDBACK

I wasn't feelin the flow at times, which is probably my fault since I'm readin it the way I'd flow it, which is different than most. :D @ speed flow

I like the lyrics. The first verse was doper IMO.

Maybe you could do a verse about screwin up a friendship?

Originally posted by Sexorcist
I wasn't feelin the flow at times, which is probably my fault since I'm readin it the way I'd flow it, which is different than most. :D @ speed flow

I like the lyrics. The first verse was doper IMO.

Maybe you could do a verse about screwin up a friendship?

you prolly rap like I do, I can rap verry, verry fast, but I'm well rounded so I can spit almost anything.

Yeah, me too, I usually spit slower on audios I've posted here than I really do, mostly due to the beats.

You should check out my Josh diss, it's probably on the 2nd page now though. D:<

3rd page:p

I'll d/l it when I have a chance at home.

3rd verse

You’re just and innocent guy right, just into living the night life
so what if you stabbed him, you’re not getting ripped in a knife fight
you’ve had a couple of scuffles, you’re good at throwin them fists
you gotta show you can handle it if punks are giving you shit
and you prove you can, oh yes you da man, you know it
so what iF this is your second chance, your slick, you ain’t gonna blow it
they ain’t gonna a find any weapons or cash, only you know where it’s stashed
and it’s not really unprovoked beating of people when it’s a gay bash
so you get kicked out of your house, at least your friends got a couch
to sleep on, so you can keep on, clowning fools and knocking them out
you ain’t earned a dollar in weeks, in the streets you only earnin respect
by flashing hand signs to children, and gang related tats on your neck
so a new freind of yours, has a plan for scratch, lootin some drawers
it’s not like you might got locked up, they’ll go pick up the source
but maybe this shit is gettin you, you sweatin, you think it’s enough
now look what the cash has gotten you, bracelets, and a new set of cuffs

yeah the whole thing was cool...cool concept so it was interesting to read. I hope this isn't from personal experience Tykey Boi!..anyway..first verse - there were a couple of parts where your flow fell off a little..but it didn't really minimize the effect of the piece...according to most people..i have no flow in text..but when i spit it i do- so obviously it does flow - for me, like this must flow for you..lol

2nd verse there were no problems - i esp. like the bit at the beginning.

sophisticated vocab in there Mr. Montgomery..i liked the use of language a lot. You need interesting language to make an interesting topic sound good.

yo, you ever started somthing off, and didn’t think it would last
soon it’ll pass, besides it’s not like it’s everyday you get smashed
and you got a lil extra cash, so why not, say fuck it and get high a lot
started off small, hitten ya friends stash, never would buy a rock

thought that ^^ was dope..flowed really well.

This was an interesting piece tyke..you're elevating and improving with every spit..cant wait to see you in audio sunshine...you're definitely up there with the ill cats on this site..good work..~pz~

ha, no not from personal ish, more or less friends, and the drug addiction shit I can relate to.. Thanks much I apreciate it sweet art'

i thought it was all super dope. But thats prolly 'cos i thought tha flow was perfect (prolly just how i read it through infected English eyes).

But very tight.

In tha words of Generic Newbie #17578, "you're good".

PZ>

oh man tyke you be seriously elevation on this one, nice work, like the concept of the song and the image of it, its common but no one ever wrights about it, good work, thought the vocab was nice and you put some nice multi's in there, i liked the second verse alot and the hook is major hot, cant wait to hear audio on this shit, keep the shit up, peace