im def. gonna make an audio of this shit, already got the sickest beat that goes with it... gimme some feedback..

I like graphic, psychopathics, that run around with spiked bats lit,
To burn you’ll get your white ass kicked,
damn right faggot, I ignite caskets,
And fight back when the sprites smash vets,
Alas its, the right cat who knows how to write raps like magic,
Hit the dirt before your get ass sniped and bagged kid,
It’s a tight classic, when I spit on mics rapid,
I scare the rest when tare your flesh; my knifes jagged,
It’s another game of cops and robbers, when you stop this mobster
Im the lock ness monster, you’ll get socked and clobbered,
You’ll get stalked and followed, and then we cock the hollow,
And then get u dropped and outlined with chalk in sorrow,
People wake up and get shaked up in shock tomorrow,
All you pills will get popped and swallowed,
Give me the sword and I’ll strike, give me the word and I’ll fight,
You might as well give me the world because lord of the mic,

holla

this was good.. nice as always
audio should be dope

Pretty good. Not bad rhyme schemes in there...
btw, this flowed very nice over RZA's Glocko Pop. That tempo you should be aiming for in audio I think...

Coo' flow... real nice rhyme scheme. Content got a little jumbled, but it's all good.

Suggestion:

Give me the sword and I’ll strike, give me the word and I’ll fight,
You might as well give [the whole world to the] lord of the mic,

thats not 16bars its only 8 which is only 16lines 1 bar is 2lines

damn, that shit is pretty tight son!

a necro beat migth sound sick to it

thats not 16bars its only 8 which is only 16lines 1 bar is 2lines


it sad that sombody going through the thread calling themselves obviousgot skills doesnt know how to measure audio bars 1 line equals 1 bar

that was pretty tight tho

Lol, u know how old this drop is, dude prolly wont even read ur feedback

Pretty good. Not bad rhyme schemes in there...
btw, this flowed very nice over RZA's Glocko Pop. That tempo you should be aiming for in audio I think...

^^ !!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D

Yeah, this was nice, should be good in audio

^^ Someone didn't notice the date of the post... lol

nice work man - a little violent but nice!

Get Ur Flows Up

Why do people bring up ol' topics? Shit

I listen to ur songs and man are u garbage u dont have the voice or the flows for rapping

"Songs"??? Lol,....bitch i just put out 1 freestyle,moron.....and "Flows"???Lol,....bitch it's "Flow".....Think twice or thrice before u post something,noob ass twat

just tell me how it sounds

I got a hyperdermic bullet that'll break through your teeth
it'll ricishade off ur bones and erase ur meat
with a snap of ur neckbone i made u sleep
i got a 18clip nine and it make asian heat
i got a pet on my waste and i named it bleeder
i got ice around my neck and it gets colder than a freezer
these niggas really dont want a piece of an o.g
cause i put a nigga head in the pavement and they thought i was oc
bullets like mechedes they rippin off ur body armor
and they eatin your body up like they name was jeffrey dhama
my punches are so hard it'll put a hole in ur chest
and you'll be prayin to the lord not to let me fuck with ur flesh
i only need one bullet but to make sure im using seven
im the meanest motherfucka i cant even speak to heaven

so how does it sound get back at me holla

It's good

just tell me how it sounds

I got a hyperdermic bullet that'll break through your teeth
it'll ricishade off ur bones and erase ur meat
with a snap of ur neckbone i made u sleep
i got a 18clip nine and it make asian heat
i got a pet on my waste and i named it bleeder
i got ice around my neck and it gets colder than a freezer
these niggas really dont want a piece of an o.g
cause i put a nigga head in the pavement and they thought i was oc
bullets like mechedes they rippin off ur body armor
and they eatin your body up like they name was jeffrey dhama
my punches are so hard it'll put a hole in ur chest
and you'll be prayin to the lord not to let me fuck with ur flesh
i only need one bullet but to make sure im using seven
im the meanest motherfucka i cant even speak to heaven

so how does it sound get back at me holla

in my opinion rhyming with letters is weak(o.g and oc). Your bars need re-ordering. You jump from one idea to the next and then back to the other idea.

thrice

Actual word.