aight they call me mr no name, no shame, im jus playin tha game, straight thuggin, biatch luvin, im stayin tha same.

you gotta move real fast or else, the greed takes control, dont fuck ya self up, by diggin a hole. my mind is tellin me bout men hangin from a pole, or some broke ass nigga sellin some coal. we've all gotta make a living, either from workin in a shop or even singing, we gotta get our money in some way, jus dont end up wit the KKK cus there bad mothafuckers, they nothing but a bunch of suckers either suckin cock, or wearin a nice white flock.................ah man fuck it haha


bare in mind its my first ever go so go eazy on me lol

bit shit cus i didnt no wat to rhyme bout lol ...:idontknow: :idontknow:

look at other peoples rhymes on here, look at how they are structured(in bars) look at how they word things and the type of shit they talk about...keep at it, you'll improve

ok i will thanks (Y)

i feel like im slacking, drowing in my own sorrow,two months till exams and my head is empty and hollow.im in my last year at school im being a twat, everyone else jus thinks its cool, but i am relizing how much of a fool i am, whats the point of me being at school if im not learning, instead of sleepin im tossing an turning, till i see the sun shining, its that bright its almost blinding, ive gotta wake up, start stifferning up, im not going to fuck these 2 months up..............................

any better? i actually thought about that one..?

Structure! set it out in bars

Example:

I was sitting day dreaming, looking at the sky
Reminising on times i'd just sit and look into your eyes
blah blah blah blah blah
blah blah blah blah blah blah

So on^

yep^^