enjoy... all feed will be helpful, thank you.
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i love you so much baby, but to bad its the past/
im not a historian, so history is something i cant grasp/
as the time goes on and the end gets nearer/
me n you getting back together, the chances get rarer/
talking to you everyday only makes it hurt more/
theres a boy in the way, im talking through a door/
reminiscing the times and the things we use to do/
but when someone else got involved, how quickly the fuse blew/
one hour of not talking, thats just way to long/
so i'll just sit back with your picture and play this song/
just letting you know youll always have a place in my heart/
so lets just cut to the chase and race to the start/
i know writing this rap might not seem much/
but its how i get my feelings out, im bottled up, it gives me a rush/
as we go on and move forward with our lives/
im waiting for us to work together, let that hour arrive/

I thought thiz waz pretty great, emotional and i connected wid part of it, the flow went off in some parts, but it's ok, keep it up man

uppin'.. ill feed yours, just leave your link.

what does it take to get feed jeezzzzzzz -- bump'

i liked it. the flow was....... iffy at times. really connected with it.

i thought the flow as kool

was deep n had a nice story-ish feel to it

rythming wasnt anything spectacualr but it doesnt need to be for this type of verse, nice work man