Im Stretchin the rap scene wid imagination
to a new leval of extream game exaggeration'z
powering the whole world'z insane contamination'z
leaving ur lil kid dead before highschool graduation
im not evil it perk'z up my sensation in masturbation
then i'll do it more for chick'z on my cam for faster payment'z
no it'z really not funny im a kid in despreate need of money
see my parent'z prolly, are so poor they stole my lil bit from me
you call that some good parent'z and they wonder why i have a merit
it'z just something i did inherit which show'z their nothing to be cherished
but i will try and try to fight back till i manage up the right act
till they stop just like that after i finally get can thrue wid my rap'z

Im Stretchin the rap scene wid imagination
to a new leval of extream game exaggeration'z

good

powering the whole world'z insane contamination'z
leaving ur lil kid dead before highschool graduation

good

im not evil it perk'z up my sensation in masturbation
then i'll do it more for chick'z on my cam for faster payment'z

lol, kinda abstract, but decent

no it'z really not funny im a kid in despreate need of money
see my parent'z prolly, are so poor they stole my lil bit from me

good, u could reword the last part of 2nd line, "stole my last dime from me" ( sumthin like tha) or get more specific.

you call that some good parent'z and they wonder why i have a merit
it'z just something i did inherit which show'z their nothing to be cherished

good

but i will try and try to fight back till i manage up the right act
till they stop just like that after i finally get can thrue wid my rap'z

take "and try" out. Change to "keep fightin back", or I'll neva stop fightin back", cuz I think it would flow better. Just my opinoin. Also, reverse "get and can" in last line.

till they stop just like that, after I finally can get thru wid my rapz.

good,

This is one of yur best rhymes so far in my opinion. Leave rep if u can. Keep practicing. Elevate.

i dunno your other stuff, but this had good vocab and a nice flow maintained through out, good structure aswell, if you looked over it a couple of times and re-wrote i can bet you could neak n alot more multis,

example

Im Stretchin the rap scene wid imagination
to a new leval of extream game exaggeration'z

some more work that could be a strong 3 word multi

there's couple more like that

but overall it was nice keep at it :D

Thx for the feed