just a few bars trying to break yet another block, i think i might have cracked it, but i can never rate my own work, i always think the worst of it...so i need your input..like i said feed=rep




I got it all you can’t conceal I’m hot
I don’t bite your rhymes I steal your thoughts
i been blessed and cursed in digesting verbs
abusing the alphabet, like molesting words
Spits coming so hard I impregnate the mic
the devil sold me his soul and I raped his wife
take my writers block out me, and put it in you
take my place?? you couldn’t get a foot in my shoes
so forget about filling them just watch as I’m killing them
your veins? Im spilling them, nightmares? I’m fulfilling them
Spitting my thoughts in the mic, supporting the tight
I aint stealing your light I’m aborting your hype

you definitly broke it..Dont have time to give good feed but you broke it

This was nice. The highlight for me was:
take my writers block out me, and put it in you
take my place?? you couldn’t get a foot in my shoes
so forget about filling them just watch as I’m killing them
your veins? Im spilling them, nightmares? I’m fulfilling them
Spitting my thoughts in the mic, supporting the tight
I aint stealing your light I’m aborting your hype
You should drop more often Mike.

I got it all you can’t conceal I’m hot
I don’t bite your rhymes I steal your thoughts
i been blessed and cursed in digesting verbs
abusing the alphabet, like molesting words
Spits coming so hard I impregnate the mic
the devil sold me his soul and I raped his wife


That part was sick...

Forget writers block cuz, you're back..

shit was tight. Punches were off da chain, you managed to make the lyrics catchy & brillinat. The flow was a lil' bit off I guess (unless you would use some certain beat but I doubt it) in the 1st bar you were off by one syllable on each line & in the 5th bar your lines were longer by one syllable on each line too but it's okay you can solve this with some high breath control.
lyrically it was good, you need some work on your multies cuz I noticed that you used too many half rhymes:
digesting/molesting
impregnate/raped
killing/fulfilling
half rhymes can be quite useful sometimes, especially when you enhance your flow using them, to make it goes smoother. but too many half rhymes usually denote weak multies.
but other than that you did pretty well & you definitely brock it...
keep droppin'...can't wait to hear your audios.

i love my half rhymes :)

thanks for the feed everyone

Those Half Rhymes Are Definitely Yer Own Style, But That's Just Positive Thing. It Was Really I.L.L. (Know What Am Sayin'?), Keep It Up

only thing i didnt like was "the devil sold me his soul and I raped his wife"

but everything else was straight fire - good shit.

thanks for the feed, uppin

I got it all you can’t conceal I’m hot
I don’t bite your rhymes I steal your thoughts

good

i been blessed and cursed in digesting verbs
abusing the alphabet, like molesting words

good

Spits coming so hard I impregnate the mic
the devil sold me his soul and I raped his wife

aight, a little bit too abstract

take my writers block out me, and put it in you
take my place?? you couldn’t get a foot in my shoes

aight, but it connects to the next bar which is good

so forget about filling them just watch as I’m killing them
your veins? Im spilling them, nightmares? I’m fulfilling them

good

Spitting my thoughts in the mic, supporting the tight
I aint stealing your light I’m aborting your hype

"Supporting the tight" was sorta wack in my opinion, but i flowed good.

Good flow, multies. Leave rep if u can. Keep practicing. Elevate.

yeah i didtn like the supporting the tight line either

why not :( lol....

thanks for the feed ...

repped who i could