just kinda tryin to rap lol i havnt in a while i just keyed this to im so happy lol i had anuther verse planned for the colabo but i thought this one was better..original just gnna be a writers block..get over it verse

takin crew leaders down stay ready or im grippin ya neckless
twist around and pull till the beads snap and ya neck rips
Keys back with the rhymes bringin style back to the board
going back to when haters were created and formed
just to reach in the whom way to early to be snappin the cord
lyrically murderin in battles to many bodies in the back of the ford
but with rappin im bored, switchin the style now im packed with the gore
go head and laugh till ya die!, I.L.L is here and returnin with the Fire
turn your house into a cremation Zone and watch you burn till im tired
of watchin all the burned up rappers that have earned their retirement
im still patiently waitin for all the greats till they've graciously faded
Sick of the rap racial issues now every fuckin Race has been tainted!
its like most non african rappers cant make it unless their Face has been painted! (icp)
people who deserve it still wait while the famous lay thankless
as the real rap skill rises in the Souls of the peeps who stay bankless
the battle for the top of the Rap castle with never end till the anger has Vanquished!





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bringin style back to the board?
you left came back more wack than before

lol^...

it was ok, but kind of dissapointing, i seen a lot better from you, altho i liked the idea of the last two lines but they were stretched as fuck.

ya..kinda a get over it verse..as my first verse in a while...

takin crew leaders down stay ready or im grippin ya neckless
twist around and pull till the beads snap and ya neck rips

Takin Crew leaders, sounds wack in my opinion, the other shit is aight.

Keys back with the rhymes bringin style back to the board
going back to when haters were created and formed

first line is aight, second line is sorta wack

just to reach in the whom way to early to be snappin the cord
lyrically murderin in battles to many bodies in the back of the ford

good

but with rappin im bored, switchin the style now im packed with the gore
go head and laugh till ya die!, I.L.L is here and returnin with the Fire

this line was wack, an this ain't the Olympics, so whats up wid the "Uneven Bars", each line has a different rhyme,


turn your house into a cremation Zone and watch you burn till im tired
of watchin all the burned up rappers that have earned their retirement

aight, this line dont make sense

im still patiently waitin for all the greats till they've graciously faded
Sick of the rap racial issues now every fuckin Race has been tainted!

the first line is wack, the second is good

its like most non african rappers cant make it unless their Face has been painted! (icp)

u got three lines in one bar? this line is good.

people who deserve it still wait while the famous lay thankless
as the real rap skill rises in the Souls of the peeps who stay bankless

first line wack. Famous emcees ain't thankless, most of em.
second was good.

the battle for the top of the Rap castle with never end till the anger has Vanquished!

yur bars were uneven. this last line is aight. Decent vocab.

I left feed so leave rep. Keep practicing. Elevate.

..you leave goodish feed i guess thats why "I". god placed you hear lol andwith the gore and then fire..i was just making more than 1 bar rhyme..