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KrAyZy
02-04-2007, 09:34 PM
my weapon iz ma brain in thiz game to flame wid action'z
cuz of wat you say nothing'll be the same wid my insane reaction'z
ur the fag'z dissin gay'z cuz it'z all like u fall for gay'z attraction'z
plus the way'z you actin, but i'ma be eliminating you real fag'z to fraction'z
think ur all good cuz ur all brother'z, the same, who just lag fan satisfaction'z
and in day'z i still keep askin, why no labal'z az you said ur makin rap beef'z smashin
my rhymning'z hell that shock'z you in ur head and loud like siren bell'z
im like shotgun'z, like a mic wid shell'z beef wid me ya might az well fight ya selve'z
cuz it'z suicide and by the time i fully form ya couldent bite if ya idol fell
so dont get excited well if you get any label'z i highly doubt ya title sell'z
and if it sell'z i'll bust you crooked az hell az if you werent born wid spinal cell'z
im an emcee who when beefed can release a brain disease
with each word on a beat can releave you of ur own game deeased
fuck im so mean i'll just leave you dead along wid each one of ur insane belief'z

sometime'z it bother'z me why i still bother to write
just trying to deliver a fucking message and im causing a fight
so every piece i make i will take it and it'll be released on stage
showin you wackcee'z are fake just to piss off and beef up rage
so i can meet more fag'z to tear apart so the world wont be so insane
like in town while joggin im probably hawkin
disgusted by the cop'z mocking ya dog'z barkin
and fag'z arguin over where their car'z parkin
hell girl'z cant be safe at mall without gettin stalked shoppin
boy'z get hopped on at the park or cycling the block or gettin shot walkin
look at the wrong guy and gun'z start cocking
like how iraq iz rotting and wid bush nothing iz stopping
and cussing iz blocking us to stop and wow the world iz falling apart, shocking
next thing you know the nip'z are back workin on railroad crossing'z
and the black'z are back wid slavery marking'z and god'z end'z up plotting
the world'z ending wid rain 28 night'z and day'z continuesly dropping

OvaDose
02-04-2007, 10:38 PM
To be honest the flow and structure is terrible and i can't imagin that being audio because you'd struggle to spit it...

KrAyZy
02-04-2007, 10:43 PM
To be honest the flow and structure is terrible and i can't imagin that being audio because you'd struggle to spit it...

lol, i spit it already after i wrote it and during i wrote it, i had no problem. iz text rap'z really that complex? lol

Eleven
02-05-2007, 05:08 AM
WAZZUP MY HOMIE THAT TRIZACK WAS THE SHIZNIT BIZATCH

why do you use "z" instead of "s" ???....


looks plain retarded

OvaDose
02-05-2007, 05:58 AM
Hurry up and do an audio then...

KrAyZy
02-05-2007, 09:04 AM
WAZZUP MY HOMIE THAT TRIZACK WAS THE SHIZNIT BIZATCH

why do you use "z" instead of "s" ???....


looks plain retarded

i just started doing it for some reason and it became a habit :'( lol

OPIV
02-05-2007, 03:12 PM
I thought the intro had some interesting concepts. The last line was dope. There were some wack part in the middle toward the end. U need to rap about more social issues cuz that was the best shit in there. the part about Iraq and Bush was dope. Write a whole rap about shit like that cuz its the most focused and has the most relevance. Also, stop usin the Z's, or change ya name to ZOro, cuz if u tried to pronounce all those z's while u were spittin it it would sound like shit. only use the z's in words like "uzin" or other words that emphasize the z's.

OvaDose
02-05-2007, 07:19 PM
Look your concepts suck dick, there is no concept you just rap.. this is like shit you'd expect in a freestyle... Fucking everyday lyrics, theres no funny punches or clever metaphors and if theirs no concept then you need those punches and meta's..

KrAyZy
02-05-2007, 07:21 PM
Ya Ok, w/e you say dude ^

OvaDose
02-06-2007, 07:28 PM
lol bitch i own you, so don't get smart.. i know what the fuck i'm talking about, you can either take it or leave it, but look at the feed your getting, it's shit...

Just trying to help..