Yo bitch im talkin to you! and other fucker'z im droppin them too!
im sick of all of you! not gettin my point now im fuckin stopping the fued!
you dont know wat'z botherin dude! my father? i dun care! if my father'z dead coo!
i dun know how to go on! shit just seem'z flow wrong!
nothin matter'z when i blow shot'z! buttin im tryin to stop shit i put up wid for so long!
and dont expect me by wat i said to be quitting soon!
till you hear me in ur head and u lay dead in ur living room!
all i just want iz you! hear me! and get my message thru! clearly!
bout ur shit that nearly steered me to suicide i dont mean for you to fear me!
i have so just had enough! already my early child hood waz haz been rough!
and it'z drove me mad enough! i cant take it and i just wanna bash these fuck'z!
Ok, i dont give fuck wat people think of me but listen up
bother me im givin a fuck and i just wont be caught spittin stuff!
that my my after hurt after i beat the shit out of you critict fuck'z!


thiz iz message it'z not ment to just be a rude song
y'all just fuck over and cuss shit for too long
and im just ticked and want all you gone
if you cared shit you would atleast clue on
and realized all the shit that you prick'z do wrong



and to you mom! i hate you i'll make you just a few song'z
why? i want you gone bitch! so clue on you've bitched me over for too long!
ur the one who made my dad leave! prolly want me out to wonder sadly!
but im not leaving crap see, you've hurt me and now you gettin fucked over badly!
i know you never felt glad to have me! im not sorry mom but ur gonna have to have ur ass bleed!
you can run but lastly that'z all you can do iz to avoid gettin ur ass beat!
but there'z acually, a good thing in the rap sceane,
i can still get to you verbally and vastly,so run bitch! im step'z ahead so you'll never get pass me!

thiz iz message it'z not ment to just be a rude song
y'all just fuck over and cuss shit for too long
and im just ticked and want all you gone
if you cared shit you would atleast clue on
and realized all the shit that you prick'z do wrong

wtf, it show'z smiley i dident put on my topic..lol
feed plz?

Yo bitch im talkin to you! and other fucker'z im droppin them too!
im sick of all of you! not gettin my point now im fuckin stopping the fued!
you dont know wat'z botherin dude! my father? i dun care! if my father'z dead coo!
i dun know how to go on! shit just seem'z flow wrong!

thiz iz message it'z not ment to just be a rude song
y'all just fuck over and cuss shit for too long
and im just ticked and want all you gone
if you cared shit you would atleast clue on
and realized all the shit that you prick'z do wrong

and to you mom! i hate you i'll make you just a few song'z
why? i want you gone bitch! so clue on you've bitched me over for too long!
ur the one who made my dad leave! prolly want me out to wonder sadly!
but im not leaving crap see, you've hurt me and now you gettin fucked over badly!
i know you never felt glad to have me! im not sorry mom but ur gonna have to have ur ass bleed!

There are so so so so so so so so so so so so so(you get the point) many things wrong with this. First of all, you need some serious fucking help. Second of all, your "slang" writing is annoying, that is almost exactly the way i used to write my freestyles and shit. You should realize that people will take you more seriously if you spell things out correctly, like instead of wat, what. Instead of iz, is. It just makes you seem a lot smarter. Third of all, having mom, ass, and bleed in the same sentence is straight out fucking nasty. So if you want to become a better person, better artist, and better song writer then listen to what I have just told you. It is pretty much pointless to write a song about your parents, in a serial killing way. What happened in the past happened bro, you gotta learn to get over it and look foward to the future. I'm not trying to offend you or anything but if you wrote about the things that matter to you the most in your life then you would make the audience feel the emotions that you feel. And thats what its all about. I'd love to see how you develop throughout the future, goodluck, and if you ever need any help feel free to PM me about anything.

There are so so so so so so so so so so so so so(you get the point) many things wrong with this. First of all, you need some serious fucking help. Second of all, your "slang" writing is annoying, that is almost exactly the way i used to write my freestyles and shit. You should realize that people will take you more seriously if you spell things out correctly, like instead of wat, what. Instead of iz, is. It just makes you seem a lot smarter. Third of all, having mom, ass, and bleed in the same sentence is straight out fucking nasty. So if you want to become a better person, better artist, and better song writer then listen to what I have just told you. It is pretty much pointless to write a song about your parents, in a serial killing way. What happened in the past happened bro, you gotta learn to get over it and look foward to the future. I'm not trying to offend you or anything but if you wrote about the things that matter to you the most in your life then you would make the audience feel the emotions that you feel. And thats what its all about. I'd love to see how you develop throughout the future, goodluck, and if you ever need any help feel free to PM me about anything.

thx, but i just got too much of grudge against my past life and now, i cant help it that i write about it. and i do write the emotion'z that i feel, but i am still elevating too. plus i dont really give a fuck about the audience. alot of my song'z im trying to atleast get a message thru and that'z it. and about my z's, i dont take it az slang im just use to writing like thiz, i'll try to stop tho. my basic main massage iz that: for people to fuck off, leave me alone cuz i hate thiz shit and i'll stop my bullshit, not that im trying to copy eminem but all thiz bullshit iz wat triggered me into rap, so people should fuck off and ieave me be and i wont fuck around wid them. no offense to people who arent fucking me over.

You gotta relax, Not all people want to fuck you over. I know its not easy to forget about your past-life and im not telling you to forget all about it. Just realize that your young, and you have your future to look foward to. I was just like you a couple years ago with the z's and shit. Eventually as you mature, you will start to find these things you did in your past ridiculous. Im glad that you understand that rap isnt just about anger. There must be some good things from your past that you can write about. Just let go of that grudge, your parents decisions are not in your control. Its not your fault, so dont act like it is. Write more, explore other styles, techniques, etc. and you will be a great emcee.

I was just like you a couple years ago with the z's and shit. Eventually as you mature, you will start to find these things you did in your past ridiculous.

Thank God for that one.

Hahaha, Ben. You remember the y's? Shyt.

zhyt.. i remember that zhyt..

lmao you guyz are ztupid..lol damnit you retardz

That had sick flow, though. Let's be honest. Very Eminem-ish, but dope. His personal issues are what they are, but the lyrics are concise and effective. Stay working, it takes time.

I'm getting scared of the shit you are liking now-a-days.

I don't listen to anything on here, but I'm giving some positive feedback to a kid trying to get better. I stopped giving feed here because every netcee nerd thinks they actually can rap and make fun of people just starting. Let dude get better, give him advice.

It's not like anyone on here is even halfway nice outside of two guys.

woooooooorrrrrrrddddd

I don't listen to anything on here, but I'm giving some positive feedback to a kid trying to get better. I stopped giving feed here because every netcee nerd thinks they actually can rap and make fun of people just starting. Let dude get better, give him advice.

It's not like anyone on here is even halfway nice outside of two guys.

3 guys........

Posting now?