Okay i made this recently, i might still work on it a lil bit.

Toughest kid of all walkin down the hall'z,
throwin you agaist the wall'z startin bunch a brawl'z,
rippin off ya ball'z breakin all ya jaw'z,
i dun care about the law, fuck like im ever gettin caught.

My mind iz twisted, what the point of ur rhymn'z? i seem to have missed it,
they go through my head and through the other side,
ya rap'z are dead they no better then mine,
like i said, everything screwed in this mind,

man the police wanna get me they just dont respect me,
man i already got the daughter of my wishe'z,
when ya be stuck fatherin ya bitche'z,
man i should slaughter ya and leave ya in stitche'z.

man just face it i am the best,
dont be racist and show some respect,
man i hate this but wadda ya expect?
i had to make this, better then breakin ya neck,

ya fat ass wanna autograph?
fuck you aint gettin crap fast
until ya lose some of that fat ya have
cuz ya bo iz so bad it'z driven me mad

for all ya callin me wack,
ya gonna get smacked, (murdered)
for callin me crap,
im sorry im fuck from all of the crack,
now fuck off, cuz wacky just stuck back.

Feed Plz

you gotta use more multies, and fix your structure.

"man just face it i am the best,
dont be racist and show some respect,
man i hate this but wadda ya expect?
i had to make this, better then breakin ya neck,"

right there it looks like your tryin to use multies but there forced, your multies have to have the same ammount of syllables.

face it, racist= multie
hate this. make this= eh i guess multie

yep^^