as i forced my energy, showing you off, you still lost, coming up short
to the boss.
its not that i dont like you, keep aging me on but i dont wanna fight you
im the regular rapper, the guy you dont wanna hype too
you might think different of me, cause this is my first drop, and the last
one you get from me,
people hate on the board, of course, they spark you a fire and let you off the torch/
it not easy being a rookie, writing raps on the porch,

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feed backs..... just starting out...

needs multies wordplay punches/witty puns right now its kinda just plain and doesnt really excite me man

For being new, it's pretty good, like he^ said you do need to get more complex, with multies, an maybe a little vocab. Good for a first drop, keep working.

everyone tells him to use multies and shit as if when you tell him to use it he'll know what it is

Thanks for the feed backs,, i will work on the multies and punches
more..

everyone tells him to use multies and shit as if when you tell him to use it he'll know what it is


aight multies

smashing ya brain
passing ya game
tactics get slain

those are all standard 4 syllable multies they have to match syllable or they dont count and they also have to match rhyme scheme and not be completely forces

witty puns just go to rapmusic.com and listen to any grb battles and they'll have a lot in each one

fag-chicks-are-lame

Wack.

he had a multie or 2 in there..but anyway