Ay yo i'm White_Mouse. I like eminem ok but i think his old stuff was extremely good and now he sucks g-unit dick.
anyway i'm an emcee and here's a track taht i did for a mixtap that's coming out son called "The Hloy Culture Speaks vol. 2"

it s at

www.myspace.com/mousetheprodigy

here's the links that i've given feed to.....

http://www.eminemweb.com/board/showthread.php?t=27878

http://www.eminemweb.com/board/showthread.php?t=27691

and here's a wuick keystyle i did

disasterous moves and now i'm trapped in the tomb/
result to cannibal instincts, say a prayer for every rapper consumed//
i'm losin it, i'm violent i'll hang you on the wall like a crucifix/
and torture you with divine lessons until you are convinced/
i never get writers block it just seems childish/
images of vilonce creep in and turn my concious to the mind of a tyrant/
pillage your villeges and leave all the houses ablaze/
by sparks of energy that spew fromm my mouth into flame//
you all can't handle the truth your just bithes too scared/
claimin you'll send your crew after me, i'm askin who cares/
half yall just internet fags with nothin at stake/
all yall are fake, no street cred go to jail and probably get your ass raped//
this is not directed at eminem web this is to all the forums/
i'm sayin quit rappin, start writin and join the chorus//

O Come on, NO OPINIONS AT ALL!!!!
uppin for opinions.

Do you listen to jedi mind tricks?

i do listen to Jedi Mind tricks, as well as the Wu-Tang CLan, MF Doom, Boot Camp Kilck, Brand Nubian, younger eminem, u can see all my influences on my myspace page. However...I DO NOT BITE!!!!!

Never said you bit,lol..I just can tell you listen to jmt

yea so what do u think of either the lyrics my myspace or both?

........@ lyrics.

I won't even bother giving feed back, since you're stuck on ONLY lyrics. You're all over the fucking beat because you're stuck on complex lyrics and THAT'S IT.

Yes, I write complex, every single time, but I realise that there's more to rap than being a lyricist.

yes i realize this as well, i'm still improving on my delivery and flow, people say i can write sick, it's just my delivery and flow could be alot better, so that's what i'm working on.

Im totttally feeling JMT/IT in here.... haah good flow just needs more like carnage said.

ya voice is weird but I like it kinda reminds me of Jean Grey

ya voice is weird but I like it kinda reminds me of Jean Grey

OK that's NOT RIGHT!!!! I AM A DUDE!!!!!

the reason my voice is high is one it hasn't changed yet:-B
and 2 it's part of the mix. but like i said i'm working on it.

ya voice is weird but I like it kinda reminds me of Jean Grey

LMAO @ Jean Grey.

Anyway, if you can't handle spitting complex lyrics and still being on beat and being able to deliver, do you know what that means? DON'T WRITE COMPLEX!!

yea like i siad what i'll try to do is stillbe complex but try to stay on beat, cause i just started wrting to beats. When i started rapping it was just neighborhood stuff so flowing to beats didn't much matter WE WERE KIDS. I guess i still am. What i tend to do i come up with crazy ideeas for the lyrics but not really paying attention t the beat and just trying to make it fit. SO this time i WILL make it fit. Thanks for the feedback guys.

uppin for more opinions leave links to your threads adn i will give feed.