View Full Version : out of practice but a text....


ObLiViOn
06-18-2002, 06:11 PM
As i said, i'm a lil out of practice so this can only get better.

Yo - i gotta admit-it, i'm as "insecure" as "Jordans-belt-buckle"
Thinkin' peeps'd only "feel-me" if i "punched-'em" and they "felt-knuckles"
Lyrically "illiterate" in rap acts 'cos "Oblivion spells trouble"
Make ya hit tha "deck" wit this "hand", cos wit "clubs" i "dealt"-double
Peeps feel me but its "hollow" like tha fucking "caps-in-ma-clip"
"Feel" weak and more "pussy" than the fucking "cats-in-ma-clique"
"Breakdown", "chop-tha-page-up" ta ya and "rap-this-in-bits"
"Eat-ya" with lyrics, "squat" and motherfucking "crap-you-in-shits"
Strapping-with-clips, bitches, whyle and clap-you-wit-fists
Wild and "untamed" like "ferral", heralded as "phatter"-tha-"chips"
I'm a rapper-that-shits, on emcees, don't "start" but i'm "stoppin'-you"
'Cos i see you couldn't be "reel" if i came and "filmed" on-top-of-you
You could have "E" or "proof" but you couldn't "fix-me-up"
You could be a "DJ", faggots, and still not ever "mix-me-up"
Kids saying "dixie-cup" 'cos Slim-did, careers get hindered
"Huff" and "puff" and "rain blows" on you, leaving ya "winded"
Thinking you ghetto 'cos you "can't-spell" like "broken-wands"
Stuntastic? Dumb-spastic, "flip-tha-bird" like i'm "chokin'-swans"
Take-this, unoriginality's whack - recite rhymes like you "played"-this
I could lead you a "dance" on tha "floor" but you still couldn't "break-this"

PZ>

MC TeK5
06-18-2002, 08:03 PM
this was a good piece..
it started off really strong but started 2 sink near tha end...
sum of tha punch lines were hard 2 get
even tho you are rusty this is a nice piece
Lyrically "illiterate" in rap acts 'cos "Oblivion spells trouble"

ObLiViOn
06-18-2002, 08:13 PM
cheers Tek - nice ta see ya again Dawg.

PZ>

Creep
06-19-2002, 07:51 AM
yeah, that was a nice piece... how long have you been writing?

Phrantic
06-19-2002, 11:21 AM
not really feeling the wordplay. multis were nice.
simple flow :rolleyes: but nice vocab

not outshining, not wack either, id give it 3.5/5

ObLiViOn
06-19-2002, 02:39 PM
no more than 6 months - and only really spending any real time tha last coupla months, creep.

Why?

PZ>

Creep
06-19-2002, 04:13 PM
no, i'm just wondering

Mr. Meyahgee
06-19-2002, 04:17 PM
tight shit man,...
liked the flow, multies and wordplay
verynice dope piece
:D