I'ma give you all I got, flowin' off the top/
Is "Chop"- dead? Cuz' even though we're not-/
Friends. I hope he's not-dead even though he's a hot-head/
Life's never so trife it's worth stopp-in'/
Anyways what's poppin' or crackulatin'/
"Gotta keep comin", can't stop this lyrical"ejaculation"/ (lol)
Rhymin' cause I'm bored, waitin', and impatient/
I spit it "black and white" like "inner-racial-datin'"/
I remember in "bitches" Oblivion said "All you need is to be black and have-macs"/
Well I'm black so I got half-that/
Where the macs at? So I can make the set complete/
3 day waiting period and tax? Man that shit is weak/
Get "heat" from the street that lack the "serial"/
Second thought rather get mic a let em' hear-me-flow/
Here-we-go got keep this shit intense/
Cheerio...I got that from you English-gents/
About to "drop some shit". Got collabos "comin out-the-asshole/
Graduated tracks, gown and cap but without-the-tassle/
And work' such a hassle, wish I got money every time I "passed-go"/
Like "Monopoly" Own all the property and be a bastard land-lord/
When I started this I was wired now I'm gettin tired/
"Retarded shit" Yes this is so I think I'll retire/

well theres good flow but its not the best ive ever seen, the style is good and the rhymes started good but got a little week at the end.

well, it was actually pretty good. Im not the best at writin so i cant say that you werent good cuz then i would be a fuckin snob. as far as im concerned it was better than nethin i eva wrote, so keep it up.
peace

Wtf @ this chick copying and pasting that same reply over and over... Checkout "Shady" and "Mass Collabo" if you don't believe me...

Fucking ill shit dawg....

"Gotta keep comin", can't stop this lyrical"ejaculation"
^^ yeah, lol

Cheerio...I got that from you English-gents
lol again......

About to "drop some shit". Got collabos "comin out-the-asshole/
Graduated tracks, gown and cap but without-the-tassle/
^^ excellent flow and play on that. dope

And work' such a hassle, wish I got money every time I "passed-go"/
Like "Monopoly" Own all the property
^^ hot shit on that too, but i reckon you could've finished tha line off a little better, but who am i ta say anything?

Overall - tha lyrics and content and everything was dope. A hype drop and would sound and flow real good in audio - and while i'm abouts that, i'm working on tha verse. Got some flow issues with tha beat and can't decide ta diss Stuntastic in that or in a seperate diss....

I'll pm ya when i've done tha verse dawg.

PZ>

Cheers for tha quote too! :D :D :D

PZ>

I liked this one a lot.. It was better toward the beginning but fairly consistent.

"Anyways what's poppin' or crackulatin'/
"Gotta keep comin", can't stop this lyrical"ejaculation"/ (lol)
Rhymin' cause I'm bored, waitin', and impatient/
I spit it "black and white" like "inner-racial-datin'"/
"

"About to "drop some shit". Got collabos "comin out-the-asshole/
Graduated tracks, gown and cap but without-the-tassle/
And work' such a hassle, wish I got money every time I "passed-go"/"

great lines nan...

sweet..that was ill. i'm not about to critisize at all cause i'm not nearly as good,,,,,ill and dope shit. peace

Yeah this was dope Shady....Consistent flow and stayed pretty ill throughout...a few played concepts but a lot of originality and dopeness....

Rhymin' cause I'm bored, waitin', and impatient/
I spit it "black and white" like "inner-racial-datin'"/

^^dope..but its "INTER-racial"..lol...

About to "drop some shit". Got collabos "comin out-the-asshole/

^^Ill...

I really liked this piece...good to see some of us still do text AND audio..pz.

nice man.

i thought the first few bars were a little weak but it got a lot lot stronger after that. flow was good but i lost it in places but thats probably the way i read it!?

i would give quotes but i think oblivion summed up all the best shit before.

keep it up.

Wow nice turn-around in opinons :D ... Thanks to everyone for the feedback