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McB^
04-05-2006, 02:53 PM
Could rip ya and dip ya through the water til' you freeze and got water on yo knees//
like a freak with a birds beak on his cheek//
sleek critique is weak as midweak can speak to the creek oblique technique is the base of a sneakpeak to next weeks beat//
got wet feet and can't breathe//
they tell me to sheath my dagger//
and enwreath my anger//
like an endangered strange ranger//
a complete stranger to these parts//
and they expect me to sit and watch my stopwatch//
to time how long it takes for my rhyme to make you cry//
and if not ill launch you sky high//
like a pilot flyin his jet with regret and preset speedset press after this cassette//
bet ya feelin thickset now that you know the real deal//
you gonna feel like an automobile just squashed you like oatmeal//
time to reveal the unreal glockenspiel, cause this is dissinand u ain't missin anything//

Eleven
04-05-2006, 03:28 PM
tight shit you should really structure your raps tho (otherwise some people would find it hard to read)

btw get your ass on msn, i added you i dono if it worked..if not then add me

treble_0ne_n9ne@hotmail.com

~IntaFlex~
04-05-2006, 04:41 PM
If ya don't structure, I don't read.

McB^
04-06-2006, 11:58 AM
you and your structure.. aight ill take care of it

lil gizzle
04-06-2006, 12:02 PM
u got a really good vocab


up the multis an wordplay though

McB^
04-06-2006, 12:03 PM
how many more multies can i jam in there?

lil gizzle
04-06-2006, 12:06 PM
all the multis r 2 syllables, thats not really a multi, try gettin 3 or 4 in ur rhymes

fuk nelly
04-07-2006, 08:18 PM
that was weird, but in a good way
no hatin
holla back
fuk nelly