ok I am kinda new at this, so I hope I am setting this up correct

bars- does not matter how many
no hate votes
check in- 24 hrs
drop- at least 48hrs after you check in

3-0 is ko
5 wins.

ok um here i go


you say you had hard time/
but boy you've never commited a crime/
you try to rap,but your raps dont even rhyme/
right now i'm in my fuckin prime/
i could drop a rhyme so deadly it'd stop you on a dime/
but you wont stop, you'll fall on your face/
the me and valessa will each have our own muder case/
dont even try to reply/
cause if you step up to this you can kiss your rap career good bye/

i am checking in too
here goes, ya redneck

There is this bitch named Oly
He is so fucking whily
He may come off real cool
But in fact he is a cock-loving fool
By calling me out, he is being real fucking modest
But what he really wanted to do, was come out the closet
He hustled all his life, now trying his hand at rap
He could go a lot furter if his brother had not given him the clap*

* a STD

wish you luck Kyle

Opener-Mic
Punches-Mic
Flow-None (Last time in battle,..mic had a better flow,..but this time he didn’t…what happened?)
Personals-None
Meta’s/Similies-Mic
Wordplay-None
Closure-Oly

Over-All=*michael*

One of the best battles I’ve seen so far,gentlemen

k ill vote when me gets home

Opener-Mic
Punches-Mic
Flow-None (Last time in battle,..mic had a better flow,..but this time he didn’t…what happened?)
Personals-None
Meta’s/Similies-Mic
Wordplay-None
Closure-Oly

Over-All=*michael*

One of the best battles I’ve seen so far,gentlemen

I did not have better flow this time? I really do not know what I am doing to be honest, lol. I do valued your input tho.

eh yea i got a little carried away trying use the same sound to rhyme at the end. hence the first 4 bars, then i just put myself into a hard position. but people keep voting...

Opener-Mic
Punches-Mic
Flow-None (Last time in battle,..mic had a better flow,..but this time he didn’t…what happened?)
Personals-None
Meta’s/Similies-Mic
Wordplay-None
Closure-Oly

Over-All=*michael*

One of the best battles I’ve seen so far,gentlemen



Best battles who've seen, it was weak as hell

No offence, you guys are both new at battling

no offence taken, like i said- i really do not know what i am doing

lol i think xaphan meant best battle hes seen on them not in all tht would be crazze but them

lmao so its 1-0 looking for votes.

k so here it goes

Opener-oly (mikes opener sorta sounded like a nersery rhyme opener.)
Punches-Mic
Flow- none
Personals-none
Meta’s/Similies-mic
Wordplay-none
Closure-oly

over all= mic
even though mics sorta sounded famliar from his last battle he did oly's words were to predictable and this part totally lost me
''right now i'm in my fuckin prime''

*opener: None

*Flow: Mic (both are weak but Michael's was a lil nit good at the last lines)

*Punches: Mic

*Multies: None

*Wordplaying: None

*Rhymes: Oly

*Vocabs: None (nuthin' impressive)

*Internal rhymes: None

*Metas:Oly (not that good or explicit but the closer pulled it off)

*Similes:None

*Structure: Mic (it was close but Mic's last lines took it)

*Creativity: None

*Enjoyment: Oly (actually they both were good for beginners, great job)

*Closer: Oly (no shit, & it was pretty nice for a beginner)

*Overall: Oly

alright- 2 me, 1 Oly

thanks fot voting, BTW Stan thanks for breaking it down even more than the others. I really do value all of your critiques

upping for votes

Opener-Mic
Punches-Mic
Flow-oly
Personals-None
Meta4s/Similies-Mic
Wordplay-None
Creativity-None
Closure-Oly

it was kinda close doe, but i jus felt michales more.. keep it up both of yall!

overall=mic

alright- me 3, Oly 1

few more votes please

eh im actually atarting to fell olys more but i cant change vote but oh well anyways


looking for votes

Michael, the other dude's rhymes sounded like something outta cat in the hat. Work on rhyme scheme a bit homie.

lol to bad the vote dont count you have to be in 2 battles in order for it to count

lol to bad the vote dont count you have to be in 2 battles in order for it to count

Oh, really? I thought it was the opposite,having to vote twice before battling.

YOU MUST be in a battle before you can vote on a battle.....25 posts or more to vote on a battle....OR post a link or something to prove that you have battled before, this will encourage more people to actually battle on here, and reduce dick riding.


oh so is not 2 battles but just post a link to prove that youve been in a battle and get 25 or more postrs than you can vote so do you have a link to prove if so than your vote counts once you get 25 posts

also explain the vote in cats

multies
punches
flow
etc
etc

YOU MUST be in a battle before you can vote on a battle.....25 posts or more to vote on a battle....OR post a link or something to prove that you have battled before, this will encourage more people to actually battle on here, and reduce dick riding.


oh so is not 2 battles but just post a link to prove that youve been in a battle and get 25 or more postrs than you can vote so do you have a link to prove if so than your vote counts once you get 25 posts

also explain the vote in cats

multies
punches
flow
etc
etc


Ok, I understand now. Yo, you wanna battle me? http://www.eminemweb.com/board/showthread.php?t=23853

Alright Here goes you N00bZ

Vocab: though neither side exceeded a 5th grade reading level, Michele sounded more like a kid in a playground> OLY

Punches: MIchele clearly landed the hardest punches, oly is a cockloving fool and coming out the closet and got the clap from his bro. in the meantime oly points out that micheles rhymes dont rhyme and he never commited a crime. wow big fuking deal >Michele.

Metaphors: A Metaphor is defined as: A figure of speech in which a word or phrase that ordinarily designates one thing is used to designate another, thus making an implicit comparison, as in “a sea of troubles” or “All the world's a stage” (Shakespeare).
One thing conceived as representing another; a symbol: “Hollywood has always been an irresistible, prefabricated metaphor for the crass, the materialistic, the shallow, and the craven” (Neal Gabler).
so lets see....im pretty sur i see no metaphors on either side....

Structure: Oly had the little / things at the end but used them at the end of each sentance, good intentios but..... wtf? and michele u have no structure at all, ill give pts to Oly for at least trying >OLY

Multies: i think if there even were any multies here they were not intentional.

FLOW: gosh this is pretty hard to determine since neither has flow...im guna have to go with Michele....>michele

Personals: i think Michele was more personal with his shit he atacked his alledged homosexuality, and even that he fuked his bro AND got an std from it. all Olys shit is like, in a nutshell, hes in his prime he can rhym his rhymes will make him stop dead he has no cred cuz he never comitted a crime and his rap career wil be destroyed. not so personal as being a fagit and fuking ur brother. > Michele

Creativity: well. lets see. OLY rhymes the simplist shit on the face of the fucking earth rhyme/dime/time/crime case/face
but at least when Michele rhymes fool with cool he explurges on it and denotes that he is not just a fool but a COCK-LOVING fool, that shows creativity. wich ties in with coming out of closets and geting the clap (wich rhymes with rap (good job)) from his brother. thats creative, lame and childish but creative none the less. Oly really didnt create shit other then some sentances that make rhyme dime time and crime work. fuck him. good job Michele way to smoke his ass

Overall> MICHELLE

That brings the total to Michelle 4 Olly 1.

what is this about you need to be in a battle to fucking vote?? i thought u needed proof that u have voted to call someone out in a battle?
how the fuk can i battle if i need proof that i vote if i cant vote cuase im not battling? thats a fucking catch-22, fuck that bullshit, look. im not a fuking moron, and my vote was thorough and thought out so make it count.
im dropping votes cuz i wana drop battles, dont noone fuk w/me cuz i am going to start being an active member here u wont need to wory about am i battling/voting....trust me.

good job by the way michelle, even tho i have bowel movements with more flows then you got

^
my name is michael not michelle, lol

anyays- its up to a MOD to allow your vote or not. If it were me- I would say let it count- and I am not saying that because you voted for me. The reason I think yours should count- you explained the cats in detail- giving examples and all.
I will PM a MOD in this section and ask if its allowed. if it is not- I do apreciate you taking the time out to critique Me and Olys battle


good job by the way michael, even tho i have bowel movements with more flows then you got
lol- hey like I said in this thread- I have no idea what I am doing- it is only my second attempt at rapping- and probably my last for quite awhile, lol

fuck that since wen do mods do there job, the vote counts , trust me. Noone here has to be a mod to realize that

this battle is 2 weeks old im gonna let it fuking count cuz this thread needs to be over so im gonna let ares and khorne votes count so ya i think micheal wins

Chris said your vote counts Khrome- so its me 4, Oly 1