umm, this is a concept I've been toying with for a while now.. I just started work on it, I got the chorus and the first verse.. Peep, and just tell me what ya think...

I be the epitamy of things thats causin sympathy
Another child to stare at, these kids wit disabilities
Disgusting abnormaliites, with or without disease
they tease us in to beink meek, we pray for our fatalities

I misery personified, won’t die because I wanna try
to beat this strange disease that I’m aflicted with I gonna cry
It’s hard but I, continue on, with confidence and suttle pride
Its much but I,reach up and touch the sky, like I was a shuttle flight
the only thing that worries me, are kids that hurt like pleurisy
walk through life, with gawkin eyes, that make them act so nervously
I know they aint heard me speak, I hope they know that only we
can understand, a one hand man, and know how sad the lonly be
it ain’t so bad, we let it be, we let the words discourage us
ain’t no handicapped, theres nothin to stop us from doin stuff
don’t get me wrong, the shit we;ve been through is surly tough
but you might find we’re simply dimonds, with the edges rough

I be the epitamy of things thats causin sympathy
Another child to stare at, these kids wit disabilities
Disgusting abnormaliites, with or without disease
they tease us in to beink meek, we pray for our fatalities

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awesome, thats the shit i like to see, i really love this concept and your first verse was really good, good chorus too.

i really like these lines

It’s hard but I, continue on, with confidence and suttle pride
Its much but I,reach up and touch the sky, like I was a shuttle flight
the only thing that worries me, are kids that hurt like pleurisy
walk through life, with gawkin eyes, that make them act so nervously


awesome message, keep it up and finish that song cuz its gonna be hot.later

honestly man.. nice concept man- its needed sum where right bro-sum straight flow in there...

hot chorus, nice rhymin scheme as well, nice verse... u don;'t have 2nd verse yet but should b aight, but yo man IMO- try an hit a few more meta's- an it'll b def hot bro...

~eZ

GRACIE should get in on this... she's mentally disabled.

Fuck you faggot motherfucker

nice piece, flow was good


"it ain’t so bad, we let it be, we let the words discourage us
ain’t no handicapped, theres nothin to stop us from doin stuff
don’t get me wrong, the shit we;ve been through is surly tough
but you might find we’re simply dimonds, with the edges rough"

i liked these lines

Originally posted by Tyke
Fuck you faggot motherfucker

You must be mentally disabled too. My apologies then.

And you a self righteous prick, I don't appreciate you pissing on something that has emotional value to me.

OoO! Big Words. What'd you do? Grow some prosthetic balls? Someone needs to amputate your head from your ass. Or the stick that's up it... whichever one you enjoy least.

lmao @ saying "self righteous prick", Who do you think you are? Me?

Originally posted by -NinjaMic-
Grow some prosthetic balls? Someone needs to amputate your head from your ass.

Wow, quite a tactful comment Ninja, hope it made you feel better. If you want I'll make a whole new thread just for you to attack my physical make up.

Thanks. It did... I was feeling tired until I started laughing. That'd be dope though. They should make a whole forum just for that.

http://artists.mp3s.com/artist_song/627/627904.html

Ok I did it for you, enjoy yourself. You'll have to ask denz for the forum though.

Thanks, but I didn't request it. I don't think anyone else is going to use the thread correctly... :/

no you didn't request the thread you only said it would be dope, but I figured hey, if it'll spare some paralyzed children from bein spit on by you, I might as well.

It won't. I've got this kid with one eye lined up. I'm gonna buy him a monacle.

how about some "glass balls" just for good measure

Good idea, can I borrow one of the two you never use?

you can have em both, they would look great on your chin

What do you need me for? Your hand get tired? Just switch to the other... n/m.

your the one that was askin to borrow em homie, your mom helps me out when my hand gets tired anyway

lmao@ your inability to come up with a diss I haven't heard before

lmao @ your inability to juggle

"No Idea Is Original. It's never what you do but how it's done."

Now you could make the obvious ball joke... and continue to be a living example.

lmao @ me bein able to juggle two oranges with one hand

yeah your right, but as they say one good hand deserves anoth-... oops. uggh, someone help me out here and give me a hand wi-.. oops... umm, can't you tell I'm armless, I mean harmless? but I'v got to hand it to you, you got me there- ...oops....:rolleyes:

tyke, good flow....people like ninja are complete bitches.....nice rhyme....peace out dawg

I'll shit on you, soldier. .. you and your dead father.

lmao @ ninja stealing lines from D12

man, i hate to say it but my lawn grass is too good for u to wipe your ass....bitch

lmao @ Tyke stealing lines from me "self righteous prick"

he didn't lie when to called u it

Originally posted by soldier4eva69
man, i hate to say it but my lawn grass is too good for u to wipe your ass....bitch

Damn, not the lawn grass diss. How about I go wipe my ass on your fathers grave?

I never realized how little thought a personal diss requires.

and what nationally released single was that on ninja?

Originally posted by soldier4eva69
he didn't lie when to called u it

Yeah... he was right when to he called me that.

lmao@ ninjas inability to act human

Originally posted by Tyke
and what nationally released single was that on ninja?

My cameo on Second Hand Smoke.

Originally posted by Tyke
lmao@ ninjas inability to act human

lmao @ Tyke barely being a human

lmao @ soldier coming to my rescue, and being very ineffective at it

lmao @ lmao

Originally posted by -NinjaMic-


lmao @ Tyke barely being a human

oh no, not the comparision to an animal diss:(

man u are a low lifed mother fucker who have no compassion for life. seeing u go behind peoples back in derision. man your thoughts are wack and dilopidated. ninja...pick on someone who will not make your ass look 2 inches tall.

lmmfao@ ninja being only 2 inches long

lmao@ ninja never getting this many replies on his raps

lmao @ tykes reply....that was fucking funny

No.. that would be degrading to animals. Can you really juggle oranges with one hand? You should join the circus.

lmao @ only 4 of these replies are actually about the verse

Oops, correction. Three.

Originally posted by soldier4eva69
man u are a low lifed mother fucker who have no compassion for life. seeing u go behind peoples back in derision. man your thoughts are wack and dilopidated. ninja...pick on someone who will not make your ass look 2 inches tall.

Wait... how am I going behind anyone's back?

What are you trying to say? Pick on people who are smaller than me? I'm trying to.

You are one stupid mofo, man... your father must have killed himself when you were born.

well Ninja, if I am barely human, I would either be a monkey, single celled organism, or maybe a zygote? I only said animal because it was lower on the evoltuionary chain than humans. Either way it was a very vicious diss, worse than lawn grass diss.

lmao@ the fact that ninja thinks it wasn't obvious that only three of the responces were concerning the verse..

Of course not. Deformed animals have a very low survival rate... you're too lucky to be an animal. CHUD is more like it.