watchin my self in mirror, i see my self but ain't me i look diferra
I see a monster filled wit pain & shame, it just get's bigger
l lose my soul every time i see this lyrics, I'm suppose to express my self but it's the same image
every where i go i hear the same noise, it's the voice of that monster it draws close
I see no face, but i know where it's placed, right in my heart damn it's so dark in there
i can't even see my hand when i extend my arm so far
he always says give me a chance i wouldn't despoint ur fans
ain't got no fans, but if i do, who wana hear shame & pain speak's so freely
I burid my motion in cold stones, it's common, don't they say gangsta blood runs so cold
that's why they say rap is bad for u , cauze we express cold emotion & it's Poison in u
Echo in my mind ( LEAVE ME ALONE & I'LL SHOW THIS WOLRD)
what u gona show 'em i'am man I ain't got notin to hide
I express my self usin letters , which I make 'em words that rhyme
it suppose to describe me in detailed motion, but it lies
cauz the same faceless monster appears to be alife inside
this domed lyrics make in him come back stronger than last
damn i wish i could stop rap, but i just can't

seein ur self it just hard been, mirrors reflects the true u in ya
knowin that the true u is the most wanted man for u
seein him in dreams it's just reflection of mirror
MIRROR IMAGE NOTIN IS TRUE
look different way & u 'll see who is u
MIRROR IMAGE IS JUST DIFFERNT WORLD
seein who u wana be or who u afraid u are
MIRROR IMAGE IT AIN'T NO ORDNAIRY IMAGE
mirro image is just one of ur many image

see no shame in failin i failed million times, but i still rhyme
this thing in me think i ain't got no sprit inside
as long as pen & paper been made, my ink will revise my rhyme
I fight it wit tears, cauze no weapon could stop this things
internal bleedin cauzed by thoughts i kept piled inside
reduce the risk of dyin by showin this monster some light
I lie for livin but when the monster spit's he expose my mind
who is me i'm no more could decide
between Lyin man or non-human who speak's our lang
I either give up or sleep on my sister's rug
livin of the back of girls who i'm suppose to support
that's it i give up. show them who u are
I' AM THE MAN WHO U' ALL FEAR INSIDE
I SPIT MURDER SEN, ALTHOUGH THE BODY I'AM IN HAVE NEVER SEEN
I SAY FUCK, CUNT, AND ANY MOTHA FUCKIN CAUZ FOR BUCK
I KILLED MILLION PEOPLE IN DREAMS, NOW I'M OUT
I'LL KILL MILLION MORE WITH MY LINES SO WATCH OUT
SEE THE RED MARK IN UR EARS IT'S UR MINDS TEARS MIXED WIT FEAR
OK YOU WON'T/ THEY ARE UR DARKEST MOMENTS AND HOPES
LISTEN CLOSLY CAUSE A.j I'LL FREE 'EM TOMO
EVERY LINE HE SPITS BREAK UP A BRIK
SO BECARE FULL OF FALLIN SHIT

man
this my first post on this website and i wana know wat u all think of it.
any comments

I didn't read all of it,...just the 1st 2 lines,...it's good

thanks.... i think, but i would like to know if there is any flaws in it or if it's fucked up, anything at all.

It's.... alright I guess. It doesn't really rhyme and it wouldn't matter but the fact that you were tryin' to rhyme for most of the time .. does. Also, you kept mentioning that you're rhyming so I'm assuming you wanted to rhyme? And thus, it doesn't flow consistently...

The concept of this piece of writing is good.