Okay, i'm gonna be infesting this forum for some time in the future, so i thought i'd just show you what i've got meanwhile... not that i'm very good or anything, but hey, check it out anyway


It feels like someone's rosting my brain over again
My mind in a rollercoaster of flames, warmer every day
Every moment of pain fills my eyes like an ocean of rain
I'm going insane, my failiures come back to haunt me
My friends taunt me, but don't see the way i'm walking
With a gun in my jacket, they're unaware i'm stalking them
Speaking their languages, I'm too filled with androgens
Melting in their soil, then attacking them like vandalism
The amber prism in my eyes following their every footstep
Who'd guess I'd get depressed? They underestimated me
Full of useless air, infested with the breath still in my chest
Convicted of theft once, now it's murder-death-one
My next gun, the one to my forehead, before it gets pressed on
Arrest one, but get overrun by thousands and then some
Here to rule you all, bigger than my brother, I'm god's next son
People get frightened, they get intimidated and act like i'm
A fucking leprechaun, like they'll catch my diseases
But i'm deceitful, i'll hide in the shadows with weapons drawn
No wonder they gave me this white jacket and strapped it on
Now i'm in this room and they think this pest will dissolve
These mattressed walls is my throne and they're my pets and soul
In time my wits will mold, though i'm dubbed with a crest of gold

nice one...do u do audio? :cool:

nope, not yet... i can't rap that i know of, and i don't have a mic, but i'm gonna take care of that in a couple of months :)

Real nice multi work... consistent rhyme scheme, but it still had some thoughtful content.

this was a nice piece man...
had a great rhyme scheme, and sum nice multiples..
i enjoyed tah content... keep up tha good werk....


Convicted of theft once, now it's murder-death-one
My next gun, the one to my forehead, before it gets pressed on


have you ever posted anywere else?
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yea dope work..nice multiples,
shcem and content....good work
nice flow and every thing...kept me reading
keep 'em coming

Originally posted by MC TeK5
have you ever posted anywere else?

yeah, i've posted on freestyling.com and ughh.com before... i'm active on freestyling.com, but i think i'll spend some time here now too. how about you?

yea.. i posted at D12board dot com for ages.. so i came here when it got shut down....
maybey we can battle sumtyme or collab...
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Originally posted by MC TeK5
maybey we can battle sumtyme or collab...

yeah, maybe... i'm just trying to get my battle style together, so i can't exactly guarantee it will be that great, so think i just need some practice... only been rhyming seríously for about half a year... but stay on here and something's bound to happen.

peace

Nice multies in some parts of it, Decent vocabulary, and some pretty good placement


Highlight

With a gun in my jacket, they're unaware i'm stalking them
Speaking their languages, I'm too filled with androgens
Melting in their soil, then attacking them like vandalism
The amber prism in my eyes following their every footstep
Who'd guess I'd get depressed?

alright overall