ok..tell me what you think

this is going to be made audio but i still havent got my mic

Title: Isolation [Explicit version]
Artist: HadeZ ft. eMCee1
Album: ??????????? Length: ?:??

HadeZ:
It ain’t easy bein’ British in this rap game soon as I say,
I rep UK, forget about the fame,
cats be hatin’ on me cussin’ on me tryna cause a fight,
sayin’ that I shouldn’t rap because I’m British an’ I’m white,
it’s kinda hard blowin’ up growin’ up in East London,
studio time ain’t easy with no fundin’,
still I’m comin out fightin’ me an beats make a marriage,
odd one out rappin’ in this land of Brit Garage,
I’m the H-A-D to the mothafuckin’ E-Z,
held back, breakin’ through in rap, it ain’t easy,
pathetic, ya hatin’ on the accent of my voice,
shit ya think that I can help it I don’t like it I don’t got got a choice,
isolated on this Inf beat, thats how I spit,
UK an’ OZ ain’t no fuckin’ with it,
I’m steady flowin’ ‘til there’s flowers on my coffin,
call me Hadez keep it rockin’ an ya know I’m never stoppin’.

i just copied and pasted from word so fuck if it comes out wrong!
:rolleyes: :rolleyes:

that was okay, keep it up and keep posting... you should work on your multi's and try a more consistant rhyme sheme.. other than that, you've got potential (not that i'm the demi-god of rapping :))

it flows very wele to the beat tho....if i can find the beat we using i will post it :rolleyes:

^Yeah, I can tell by the way it's written it would flow pretty well to most beats. Allows for alot of speed change in the delivery...

...and what dude said - multi's are nice so yeah, but sometimes they get really repetative, and I like to hear lyrics that give off more visual play, and deeper content than just stuff that's a hot syllable-for-syllable rhyme.

This was real cool... alot diff than most text I read, that's either way too simple, or way too complex.

heh thanx i enjoyed readin ur feedback...

what nthe fuck is up with ur name? lol

it was a pretty hard track to write on

nice man.... cant wait 2 hear it on audio//
you are improvin a hell of a lot

heh thanx Tek! :D

hell yea hadez you coming along very very good dogg..
but i'm still wating for your verse on our collab...and plus i might have to re-write mine all together....nice piece...
good flow, nice content and shit...good schem...nice work

thanx HeLm yea......im havinbg trouble on the beat...and the topic of our collab....i'll think someink up tho

Originally posted by HadeZ
it flows very wele to the beat tho....if i can find the beat we using i will post it :rolleyes: Yeah it probably would sound better in audio. Most tracks do look worse on paper or in text. I'm not saying its bad by the way. I'm no emcee but I'd say you can do better if you keep at it :)

yes this is ill....and it sounded ill in audio 2...it was just the quality of that mic......what mic you getting by the way?

didn't really like it. too simplistic.

combo's would make this piece a lot better, try a more complex rhyme scheme not just like rhyming A with A and B with B
improve vocab also, make your rhyme sound a bit like a dictionairy lol

id say these multi's were ok but they will have to make sense, and it..worked out well iu guess

ok...well it's hard to write on that subject

You've imroved since last time I read some of your stuff. :)