tell me what ya think bout it

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/clarity3music.htm

it quite good,but wats with the funny voice thingy lol.u also need 2 turn up the vocals when u record coz u cant hear it properly i can just make out wat ur sayin,but it is pretty hot.i like it,i havent just turned it off after the 1st time im listenin 2 it again.

Alright Thanks For The Feedback

You need a better mic I can't tell what you're saying at all. What your saying seems to be on beat though and the beat itself is pretty nice.

alright I think that Ill post hte lyrics jus

my flows detestable higher than decibals allowed acceptable
electrical flying unethical magnetic pull put you through
medical till your a vegetable ya bones detachable pull
like a lachet pull my styles unmatchable

hook: clarities the one reversing curses spilling verses
like cursive a style diversive all these mcs say theyve heard it
(x4)

Its the second verse disperse ya organs all across the earth
give an empty hearse to the church to keep um feeling worse
brains will burst spines inert burning like a black church it hurts
but what I say or do trust me its much worse be alert Ill divert
week flows to quinch my thirst dont spit first cause ya verse
will jus make it taste worse Ill jus burst from a gat to put you in
the dirt ha ha ha it over barely

hook (x4)

think that ill repost it in my normal voice

Lyrics-Not bad but it seems like just a bunch of random multis for the sake of carrying stringing syllables.
Flow-Ya it stayed on beat a lil bit, but it seemed like you were playing catchup a lot of the time and you rushed which messed up your breathe control, especially evident on your second verse.
Volume-Need a lot more of it
Voice-Can't tell really since the volume was so low but I don't like the masked voice effect shit at all. Sounds too distorted. Just rap regularly, plus you have no emotion whatsoever. Even when you go "ha ha ha", it sounds corny as hell in a monotone.

Overall-It's obvious you're new to recording so just keep trying, just take this as constructive criticism

Lyrics-Not bad but it seems like just a bunch of random multis for the sake of carrying stringing syllables.
Flow-Ya it stayed on beat a lil bit, but it seemed like you were playing catchup a lot of the time and you rushed which messed up your breathe control, especially evident on your second verse.
Volume-Need a lot more of it
Voice-Can't tell really since the volume was so low but I don't like the masked voice effect shit at all. Sounds too distorted. Just rap regularly, plus you have no emotion whatsoever. Even when you go "ha ha ha", it sounds corny as hell in a monotone.

Overall-It's obvious you're new to recording so just keep trying, just take this as constructive criticism


your right I was jus using multies lol