Perfection In My Eyes

All I ever wanted was to be part of your heart,
And for us to be together, to never be apart.
No one else in the world can even compare,
You're perfect and so is this love that we share.
We have so much more than I ever thought we would,
I love you more than I ever thought I could.
I promise to give you all I have to give,
I'll do anything for you as long as I live.
In your eyes I see our present, our future and past,
By the way you look at me I know we'll last.
I hope that one day you'll come to realize,
How perfect you are when seen through my eyes.

your rhymes are pretty simple, try to use more then one syllible
other then that its good

yeah i should do shouldn't i. im only an amature in the poetry department though so it's gonna take some time for me to be able to do stuff like that and use really good vocabulary, if you ain't noticed i don't use very long words or good vocabulary cause im pretty poor when it comes to that. Peace out homies!

I really like it... I think they're great!

Keep on writing. Then if your relationships has rough spots you can look back and remember the good times you are capturing in your poems. Poems can make you both stronger. Its like a photograph of what you can't see. The definitely prove you are true.

thanks people, oh and melissa, when are you gonna post a poem?

Haha... I dont think I am... Tough crowd here... My poems suck.

it's a tough crowd i know, very hard to satisfy, ah well, mine suck yet i still post them, just go for it Mel!!! you rule!!!

yeah as Shana said this poem is simple, but good! :)

Thank you again!