Me and my boy Peek singing (no, not rapping) bout relationships that went wrong.....y'all can probably figure my verse out..if you know me good enough you can...and no, it aint about Krys.

Aight...my boy Peeks on the first and second verse, and its ya boy Vince Lane on the third. Not really my song, but I added a verse. Aight...check...holla..

First verse
The evenin comes, I'm thinkin of you//
Sittin outside thinkin of why I had to//
(I'm...) nearly confused now- this is what I wanted//
Right- I swear this is what I wanted//
And now I'm on my own and I'm feelin the pain//
Cuz normally I'm on my own so I wasnt ready when you came//
Maybe its weird cuz we werent even together//
At all- but its feelin like forever//
I'm not strong- layin lookin up at the ceiling//
Wishin I wasnt that feelin the way I'm feelin//
(I'm...) just a loss so- somebody help me//
Lead me to the death where my life starts crazy//

Hook 2x
(girl....) We cant be together thats clear (no....)
Cuz insecurity's too many fears
We're two people livin two separate lifes
But baby girl- damn we tried

Second verse
You see the problem is you made me feel//
Worships that I never thought were real//
So when I see you and I feel them again//
I know I cant ever be your boy or your friend//
So I- just walk away cuz a part of me dies//
Cuz now when we talk I dont look in your eyes//
I just run away (I just run away) I just run away..//
See your a beautiful girl and I just wanted to//
See you happy with me right next to you//
But it dont seem possible//
Cuz our fate is separated, its too probable//

Hook (2x)
(girl....) We cant be together thats clear (no....)
Cuz insecurity's too many fears
We're two people livin two separate lifes
But baby girl- damn we tried

Bridge (2x)
We tried to make it work//
We tried to take away the hate//
But all we did was give each other more//

Third verse: Vince
All we did was just make each other hurt and//
All we got was two broken hearts in return//
So I'm feelin like Usher- I got it bad and it Burns//
I'm sad that it turned from better to worse//
We tried to make it work//
And I died when you said at first- dont play shy//
It was two weeks before that love word arrived//
And I tried to hide because I'm sort of the type of a young man//
That I had more X's than a porno site//
And the more I- write the more I- feel//
That you and me could of been real//
But instead of them sunny days we keep driven to the rain, hail hittin on the windshield//
So- when will you tell me what is the deal?//
Are we lovers or friends?//
Tryna recover from sins...// (we tried....)

Hook (2x)
(girl....) We cant be together thats clear (no....)
Cuz insecurity's too many fears
We're two people livin two separate lifes
But baby girl- damn we tried

Bridge (2x)
We tried to make it work//
We tried to take away the hate//
But all we did was give each other more//

Outro (Vince)
I swear I never meant to hurt you....
I know you feelin the same way...
But its like you from the opposite side of the tracks...
But baby girl, at least we tried..
It was...it was good while it lasted....

I'm startin to not like y'all anymore....haha, c'mon, Stans on....let me get some feedback on my shit, vato...

im just gonna stay quiet....

n wait for stan to comment... cause im too tired to read it all

Ah, you suck.

yea... well... i'll read it later

Aight...thats cool.

isn't this in the emcee area, i'll give you feedback later, got to go right now

Got it here and in the Emcee area...

He probably steals his raps just like he did the sigs. No wonder why you stole the sigs, the ones you come up with are whack

it's sooo deep..sad deep song.. a new direction, but a great one.
lemme talk about your verse only, well..generally it's tight..& lyrically it's fantastic but I don't know how it will sound when you sing it... I'm not good in singing shit. but as a rap song it will be phat..the only bad thing about it is this :

And I tried to hide because I'm sort of the type of a young man//
That I had more X's than a porno site//

this^ line is kinda weak, I mean u betta reform it so it fits more with the whole verse cus it looks like it doesn't belong to this songlyrically not meaningly..

my fav lines..well..they're all good but the last 5 or 6 lines of the verse are the best...really, they're outstanding..

And the more I- write the more I- feel//
That you and me could of been real//
But instead of them sunny days we keep driven to the rain, hail hittin on the windshield//
So- when will you tell me what is the deal?//
Are we lovers or friends?//
Tryna recover from sins...// (we tried....)

great flow, vocabs, & meanings..& the most magnificent thing about 'em are the strog rhymes..

i didnt realize you were the expert.

expert?!! I aint no expert..lol. I just gave him some feed back

yea the only feedback that people respect...

I'm flatterd.

yea the only feedback that people respect...
heey....i give him some good feedback sometimes, when i'm up to it

Remeber he's gone. Oh wait but he comes back everyday but just doesn't post anymore

^^dumbass.....

Eric... lol

that wasnt mad

well, eric it is true

Eric will take every oppurtinity to diss me no matter if I'm right or wrong

hahaha.......diss......i don't......"diss"....i hat that word....hahaha.....you still....."diss" joey every oppurtinity you get.......heh....

Joey I luved it

No :c

Joey I luved it
i have no clue, what your talking about

Joey I luved it

and your talking about what

The song that Joey posted